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Along the street, I

follow the smiling trail of
rain-sequined photos.

30 September 2008

How could I resist imagining the "back story" to this scene: at least 20 photos of happy people at a party, maybe even a wedding, scattered along the rainy street? I wanted to avoid cliche by directly referring to the drops of rain being like tears on the photos, and hope I have managed that.

An earlier version was:

I follow the trail

of smiling photos along

the rain-sequined street.

But I think the later verison is more evocative. I'm still wondering if I shld just drop the haiku format, in order to say: "I follow the smiling trail etc..."